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Page: May 18, 2012 ~ Rainbows

Every week Madison Woods posts a new photo prompt on Wednesday.  She calls it Friday Fictioneers.

Dozens of her fans, like me, write 100 words that somehow touch the subject of the photo and post links to their work on her site Friday.  Then everyone jumps across the ether to multiple little vignettes of imagination and comments on them.

Here’s my offering for this week.

Friday Fictioneers 5/18/2012

Fully awake in an instant, Mariska sprang to the entrance of the abandoned wolf den. Ears quivering and nostrils flaring, she searched for whatever had awakened her. Sunlight slanting through the trees said late afternoon and the sparkling drops sliding along their branches told of rain.

She scanned the treetops for any source of danger, finding nothing but a double rainbow arching across the sky. Exhausted by days and nights of tracking Jake, she had crawled into hiding just before daylight. The fear that the rain might cause her to lose his trail created a rumbling snarl within her chest.

13 Responses to “May 18, 2012 ~ Rainbows”

  1. I love wolves and I love the name Mariska that you gave your mc wolf. This looks like a story that will continue next week!

  2. Parul says:

    I love this!
    Very descriptive… You took us to the mind of the wolf!
    Very effective words! Good post!

    Here’s mine:
    http://faitaccompli.wordpress.com/2012/05/20/alicia-in-wonderland/

  3. Sandra Crook says:

    Excellent; I could just see Mariska in my mind’s eye. And she’s not pleased. Nice one.

  4. Scott Hays says:

    I, too, love wolves (spent most of the last two summers “interpreting” the natural history & ecology of wolves for the Oregon Zoo), and this story rings true. It’s probably just a personal thing, but in the last sentence of the first paragraph (sparkling drops sliding along their branches told of rain), I think I would have used the word “spoke” for its alliterative appeal. Just a thought. I know it’s now late in the week, but not many people have found my story and left comments. It’s at http://scottcheck.blogspot.com/2012/05/rainbow-promises.html

    1. Scott Hays says:

      Commenting (again) here rather than at my site … I don’t know how to set up my blog so that if I reply to something you’ve said, you get an email notification and know to go look there. Thanks for your extensive comments. There wasn’t much space in 100 words (more or less) to tell that part of the Jason and the Argonaut story, plus give it a little modern connection, so I relied on names to carry the background. That meant, unfortunately, that you needed to know the essentials of the story for mine to be more than just a brief mentioning exercise. For your information, Iris was a messenger, and it was she who gave Jason what he needed to know to break the curse on Phineas … she travels either by wings or by rainbow (and was a sister of the Harpies). There’s a lot more to this epic heroic tale … it is foundational to Greek heroic myth. Depending on the version you look at, it’s a pretty good read, too.

      1. Melody Pearson says:

        Yeah, see, that’s what I get for doing a “cliff notes” version instead of re-reading the whole thing. The online summary I found didn’t mention Iris at all. The 100 word limitation is forcing me to think about how to draw every nuance out of each word. You definitely did that with your story.

  5. Kathy says:

    Oh, oh, she ever going to find that Jake? I love how she sees this gorgeous picture and it makes her so angry because of what it might have cost her.

    Kathy
    http://notforallmarkets.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/after/#comment-210

  6. Jake Collin says:

    Loved the imagery here. Could see the entire scene play out in my head. Very nice.

  7. Atiya says:

    Mariska has got to be angry. This is the second time I’ve visited and I gather that you’re making all your Flash Fiction around Jake and Mariska. I love the concept. You nailed her frustration and rising anger perfectly. It has to suck that all her hard work tracking will be for nothing if she looses him. Awesome share, and thanks for commenting on mine. here is it for others to follow: http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/05/friday-flash-fiction-country-walk.html

    1. Melody Pearson says:

      I don’t expect all of it to be about them. I’m just curious to find out why she’s following him. We’ll see what the next prompt is. It may drag me into a different storyline.

  8. I loved the imagery and the fact that it wasn’t from a human POV.

    1. Milo says:

      Hello again Welcome to Friday Fictioneers!! Thank you for visiting me. This is wodurefnl. I followed her and the moonlight stopping and starting along the way. Wonder who Jake is and why she’s following him? Does she suspect he is being unfaithful? Personal note: Don’t fret. I was in the same boat when I began wondering how in the devil would I get my thoughts down in only 100 words. I figured out if I over write, then edit it down to the nuts and bolts .I amaze myself with the result realizing I didn’t need those deleted words after all.

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